Addensum: Hi ROWers! My check-in is after Jamie's great post
I am so happy to have Jamie Ayres here today with her fabulous self talking about 18 Things...you should know about writing, to coincide with her 18 Things YA book release! And now, here she is:
18
Things
You
Should Know About Writing
1.
Agents/Editors say give us the stakes first. The Hunger Games is a great example. *Spoiler
Alert* Prim gets picked at the reaping, Katniss takes her place. The author doesn't start at the moment her name gets called. It starts the day of the reaping so we
have a few pages to get familiar with Katniss, know what the Hunger Games are,
know the odds of her getting picked and how she protected her sister so Prim’s
name is only in the drawing once. This makes the moment when Prim’s name gets
called even more powerful, in a way it wouldn't have if we didn't know the
circumstances leading up to that event.
2.
Create characters that are interesting, though
they don’t need to be likable They should be compelling and inspire the
reader to want to read more. The hero/heroine should be identifiable from
secondary characters. Secondary characters shouldn’t take over the story.
3.
Know your characters. Do they have any quirks?
Words they use too much? Imagine their personalities and spread their voice
throughout the whole thing, so it’s really them when they ‘speak.’ Use a
plotting table to help you organize your characters and their scenes, here's one in this post!
4.
Dialogue should always serve a purpose. Every
quote should move the story along, show character, or share new information.
Also, be a conversationalist. Noah Lukeman, author of The First Five Pages, states: “The most common malady is use of
dialogue to convey backstory. The solution is to follow this rule: Dialogue
should not be used to state things both characters already know, that is, one
character should not remind the other character of something. It is an obvious
ploy, intended only for the reader.” (page 94) In summary, no dialogue information
dumps!
5.
Avoid dialogue tags. Always avoid things like
responded, assessed, confirmed, and whatever else there is. He said/she said.
Those tags disappear in the prose and make writing flow.
6.
Know the difference between beats and tags.
Tags are said, asked, etc Beats are actions identifying the speaker without
needing to use a tag. With tags, you want to keep it simple. Use said most of
the time, unless you want to show something in the voice or tone, but even
then, use it carefully. Things like smile shouldn't be used as a tag. You can’t
smile a word. Actions like smiling, sighing, pacing, are beats. Here’s the
difference: “I love you,” she said. TAG.
She looked down and sighed. “I love you.”
BEAT. When using a beat, there’s no need to use a tag. Pick one.
7.
Avoid impossible simultaneous actions: Closing
the door, she hugged him. As written, this is impossible. If she’s closing the
door, she can’t hug someone at the same time. In that use, use either “and” or
“then.”
8.
SNT (Show, Not Tell). Think of Twilight. We are
in Bella’s head, LIVING each moment as she experiences it. The action is
ACTIVE, not passive. Many writers make the mistake of telling the story rather
than showing it. This happened, then this happened, then this happened. Find
all the was/had/have/were and delete them to avoid passive sentences. Ex: He
was walking. Change to: He jogged/strolled/paced/ambled.
9.
Each scene needs a beginning, middle, and end. It
needs a purpose, it needs to do more than establish tension, and it needs some
sort of resolution. It really should end on a hook that makes the reader want
to read more. Don’t just blend scenes together with time passing in between,
with no clear purpose or impact. Show the character’s journey, their pain, and
their triumph. Make them as memorable as can be.
10. In Techniques of the Selling Writer,
writing guru Dwight V. Swain teaches us to spotlight three things: desire,
danger, decision. Someone wants to attain or retain something. Something else
threatens his chances of doing so. He decides to fight the threat. The thing
Character wants, the danger threatening fulfillment of his desires, and the
decision he makes, determine what specific readers will enjoy the story. You
have to give your reader a reason to worry.
11. Don’t
take on too many things in one novel. If there’s too many storylines and minor
storylines, it could cause the main story to not be developed fully. The beauty
of fictional novels is you can always have sequels!
12. Write
with all the senses: sight, hearing, touch, smell, and taste. The Bookshelf Muse is a great resource for this!
13. Use
Adjectives sparingly. Especially avoid redundant modifiers: small puppies,
yellow daffodils, cheerful smiles. Instead, choose adjectives that are unique
and add comprehension.
14. Avoid
adverbs. Constance Hale notes in her book, Sin
and Syntax, “Adverbs are crashers in the syntax house party. More often
than not, they should be deleted when they sneak in the back door.”Most
over-used adverb intensifiers: absolutely, definitely, particularly, actually, basically,
decidedly, quite, very, really, totally, madly, dearly, utterly, absolutely,
completely, mainly, usually, too.
15. Avoid
the Preach ‘N’ Teach mentality. People read fiction as an escape, so don’t try
to shove a lesson down their throats.
16. Do a
Find on the word ‘that’ in your manuscript and remove any unnecessary usage. Read
the sentence without ‘that’ and if it still makes sense, delete ‘that.’’
17. Don’t
head-hop. Stay in one character’s POV (point of view) within a scene. Also,
make sure you use only information the narrator can know.
18. Don’t
bog your story down with backstory/flashbacks, which are often frowned upon.
The main problem with backstory/flashbacks is there isn't a lot of action. They’re
fine for a change of pace, but they shouldn't be the vehicle for the entire
novel.
*What
about you? Is there anything else I should’ve included in my list of 18 Things?
Keep in mind agents/editors get HUNDREDS, yes, hundreds of queries every week.
Your work can’t be good. It needs to be flippin’ fantastic to stand out. The
competition is fierce, and there is no room for error.
Okay,
enough said. Feel free to throw darts at my image now out of frustration
(believe me, been there, done that, still not through learning yet).
Hope
we can still be friendsJ
~Jamie Ayres
Jamie Ayres writes young adult
paranormal love stories by night and teaches young adults as a public school
teacher by day. She lives in southwest Florida with her husband and two
daughters. 18 Things is her debut
novel. Visit her website at www.jamieayres.com.
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